This is just the first chapter of it. I was really curious of what other peolpe thought of it and if it was good. So please rate it, tell me what i should inprove on, and whatever you think would make my writing better. Thank you so much and i hope you like it.Chapter 1: I Watch A Car Blow Up“Stop!� yelled Danny. “God! I hate it when you – Ow! Jeeze freak, you don’t have to hit me with a pillow every time you wake me up, I mean seriously. Next time you wake me up like this again,� I was trying to think of something, but I got nothing. All I could think of was the classic switching the salt and the sugar trick, but the person with repulsive face I was looking at, didn’t drink coffee. “Ooooo, I’m so scared, what will I ever do,� she said sarcastically “You just watch, I’ll get you,� not even sure if I really would back up that statement.“Just get ready and you butt downstairs for breakfast.� “Whatever,� I imitated in her voice, but a little higher and she left my room with an annoyed face. I was pleased. Sometimes I think my only sibling,(thank God!), Beth, was sent from Mars to ruin my life, which she succeeded in when I was born and I saw her face for the first time. Anyway, I’m Danny Bailey, but most people just call me Dan. My dorky, older sister (which by the way if you didn’t catch it is eighteen and a senior in high school) prefers to call me, “Dan the dork�. Mostly all I here from her is blah, blah, blah, and guess what, blah. I fed my pet rat, Ralph, who I got when I was thirteen years old for my birthday from my parents, which was lame gift for a kid that just became a teenager not a kid allover again. I couldn’t blame my parents though, thirteen is an unlucky number.I went to the bathroom and took a hot shower. I was so tired that I almost fell asleep in it. My sister and her stupid band practiced all night and I barely got a minute of sleep. I went to the mirror and left my mark, or in other words, “Dan was here.� I slicked back my shiny brown hair and went to my closet. I don’t really care much about my clothes, so I just picked a shirt that said “Sister for Sale� and I really meant it and some dark blue jeans with grass stains on it and a white pair of socks. Yey, if a girl really does like me it’s because of the inside not the outside, right? I looked at the clock 7:15. I was somewhat late, so I grabbed my backpack, my sneakers, my watch, and went downstairs. I chugged down a glass of orange juice and gave my scrambled eggs to our dog, Jesse. “Here boy, eat up.� I said under my breath.I put my watch on and looked at the time, 7:19. I had to get to school in 11 minutes or I was dead meat. I would ruin my perfect record and my mom would kill me. When I mean by kill me, I really mean kill me, like with a knife kill me. I think she loves that perfect record more than she loves me. I guess it’s because I get bad grades in school and my perfect record is all I have one hundred percent on. I ran for all my things and I was out the door.I was walking down Jay Street when I saw something move behind the wide trees, in front of the brown, wooden fence. I stopped to look and nothing was there. I figured it was a bunny or something. I was thinking to myself what the trees must be imagining because there were trees that had been cut down behind them. Maybe they were thinking something like,� Hey, I think that’s my brother imported here from Nevada.� I laughed to myself under my breath. Suddenly, I felt a nagging pain on the right side of my neck. Then, I woke up on the pavement lying down. I thought maybe I tripped and went unconscious for a while. I am clumsy, so I wasn’t surprised. I quickly looked at my watch and it said 7:22, which meant I had 8 minutes to get to school. I started speed walking, then running because I was getting more and more late every second. Then I heard it, the thing that ruined my life forever. It sounded like a snake making its hissing sound. Then it stopped. I heard it again, “hissssss�. This time it sent a chill down my spine, top to bottom, with my hair sticking straight up like needles on a cactus. Now I started running, something or someone was chasing me.I had to make a quick decision. It was either run through a road with speeding cars, or wait for the stop light and might get killed by the “thing�. What would you have done? I did what my instincts told me to do.I ran straight into the cars and I didn’t even want to look back to see what was about to kill me. Everyone was yelling and honking at me. Some even saying words that you might hear in a rated R movie. A few people yelled to get me and my friend of the road and I thought maybe the “thing� behind me was just a kid. When I was almost to the end of the street, and just barely saw the school’s notice board, several blocks away, that said Star Middle School, and then I noticed something.

I'm writing a book too. I study Literature. Check your grammar. MAke sure that you, put the periods and commas in the right places. Otherwise, that's very good for a beginner =DD