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Old 09-07-2009, 02:58 PM
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I need someone to revise my paper for me. I'm pretty bad at my grammars and run-on sentences. The paragraphs are indented and doubled spaced. But it's not showing on here.I’m going to school to pursue my degree in Medical Administration, because I want to work in a healthcare industry, at a hospital, clinic or in a doctor’s office. I want to provide people with health care services that are affordable and help them live a healthier life. Pursuing my degree in Medical Administration gives me a variety of job positions, such as, a administrative assistant, medical records technician, coding specialist and more. Knowing medical terms will help me a lot in my life, my family, and my daily life. Medical field is a field that provides a lot of jobs in high demand. They are needing and seeking for a lot of us to work out there in this kind of economy. Medical secretaries perform many of the same duties as their counterparts in other fields, such as drafting reports, scheduling appointments and managing databases. However, secretaries who work in health care settings also need to have specialized understanding of medical terminology, billing procedures, legal regulations and other subjects unique to the medical industry. Depending on the size of the organization, medical secretaries might also fill out medical forms, file reports and transcribe physicians' recordings. Medical administrators keep healthcare offices running efficiently. They perform highly specialized work requiring knowledge of medical terminology and procedures. Administrators assist physicians and medical scientists with reports, record simple medical histories, arrange for patients to be hospitalized, and order supplies. They must also be familiar with insurance rules, billing practices, and hospital or laboratory procedures. These all are what I’ve dreamed of doing in my future.My parents agreed with what I’m going to school for. They said that it will be a great future career for me and for the fact that I have a child, it will greatly be supporting. And especially in this kind of economy today, they need a lot of medical administration and medical assistant out there. It is going to be a great future career for me and I’m having a pretty good feeling I’m walking in a good path..
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Old 09-07-2009, 03:26 PM
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I’m going to school to pursue my degree in Medical Administration. I want to work in a healthcare industry, at a hospital, clinic or in a doctor’s office. I want to provide people with health care services that are affordable and help them live a healthier life. Pursuing my degree in Medical Administration gives me a variety of job positions, such as an administrative assistant, medical records technician, coding specialist and more. Knowing medical terms will help me a lot, in my daily life, my family, and my future. Medical (Careers? Industry?) is a field that provides a plethura (You were using 'a lot' a lot in this essay. A plethura means the same) of jobs in high demand. They are needing and seeking for a lot of us(i would use a different word than 'us') to work out in the world in this kind of economy. (I would move this sentence elsewhere- It doesn't go with the whole paragraph- Medical secretaries perform many of the same duties as their counterparts in other fields, such as drafting reports, scheduling appointments and managing databases.) (Like this is a good spot to put it)Medical secretaries perform many of the same duties as their counterparts in other fields, such as drafting reports, scheduling appointments and managing databases. However, secretaries who work in health care settings also need to have specialized understanding of medical terminology, billing procedures, legal regulations and other subjects unique to the medical industry. Depending on the size of the organization, medical secretaries might also fill out medical forms, file reports and transcribe physicians' recordings. (This paragraph was good!)Medical administrators keep healthcare offices running efficiently. They perform highly specialized work requiring knowledge of medical terminology and procedures. Administrators assist physicians and medical scientists with reports, record simple medical histories, arrange for patients to be hospitalized, and order supplies. They must also be familiar with insurance rules, billing practices, and hospital or laboratory procedures. These all are what I’ve dreamed of doing in my future.My parents agreed with what I’m going to school for. They said that it will be a great future career for me and for the fact that I have a child(aw, what's his or her name? You don't have to put that in the essay though xD) , it will be supporting. In this kind of economy today, they need a lot of medical administrations and medical assistants out there. It is going to be a great future career for me and I’m having a(Use other word bsides pretty) pretty good feeling I’m walking in a good path..
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